Blur (blowtar) wrote,
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Alrighty, I've been busy (even though nobody's been commenting. Ah well). I revised the first comic on Amanda's suggestion and wrote the next two. I know the humor is rough and unsophisticated, but it'll get better, I promise :) In fact, I've already gotten better: I managed to write all three comics using the 6 panel format Ken and I originally agreed on.


DJTA - 0001 – Nuts
Setting: Ben's garage, which has been tricked out into a hangout spot complete with huge multi-computer setup, couch, tv, video games, fridge, and bar. (I'll sketch out the garage with Ken in the near future).
Panel Layout: 2 rows of 3 panels.

Panel 1
Ben’s sitting at his computer desk, staring at the two computer screens on that table with a wide grin on his face. He’s wearing his black hat and says “Viral” in white letters. This panel sets the scene of a quiet garage hacker at work.

Panel 2
Kev strolls through the door (the door is open and Kev looks like he’s in motion). Ben can be seen, still staring at his computer.

KEV: Well, I’ve been sacked.
KEV (smaller font, like it’s under his breath): hehehe… sacked…

Panel 3
Kev collapses on the couch in front of the tv.

BEN (from off panel): What did you do this time, Kev?

Panel 4
Kev puts in a video game and grabs a controller.

KEV: Disney decided I made a good fall guy for their most recent lawsuit.

Panel 5
Show that Ben is still staring at his computer screen and that he hasn’t moved an inch.

BEN: Mmm hmm. Did they find that yiff scene you hid in the Lion King?

Panel 6
Kev turns to face Ben, who is still staring at his computer screen and still grinning. Try to fit them both in the same panel?

KEV: Nope. Let's just say that in the dvd extras, Herbie was definitely "fully loaded" around Lindsay Lohan.



DJTA - 0002 – More Nuts
Setting: Garage
Panel Layout: 2 rows of 3 panels.

Panel 1
Ben’s still sitting at his computer desk, still staring at the two computer screens on that table, but this time his grin has been replaced with a stern look. His hat says “Devious”. Kev is sitting on the couch, playing video games. Maybe a diagonal split screen to show the two of them if getting them both in the same panel is too much?

Panel 2
Rob hobbles through the door, clutching his privates. Neither Ben nor Kev look at him.

Panel 3
Rob plunks himself down on the couch next to Kev with a grunt.

KEV: What’s wrong with you?
ROB: I am now unemployed.
KEV: Oh? How’d that happen?

Panel 4
Kev’s still playing video games, and Rob is adjusting his tie and making one of Barney’s trademark “smooth” faces.

ROB: Let’s just say my irresistible charm and raw animal magnetism got the best of me again.

Panel 5
Ben’s at his computer, and now he looks downright worried.

BEN: Mmm Hmm. Why’d you really get fired, Rob?
ROB (small lettering, as an aside): My name is Roberto!
KEV (also as an aside in small lettering): Sure it is.

Panel 6
Rob gets up off the couch and reaches toward the fridge.

ROB: I made a move on my boss’s wife and she kicked me in the balls. Do we have any ice?



DJTA - 0003 – Overachiever
Setting: Garage
Panel Layout: 2 rows of 3 panels.

Panel 1
Ben is standing at his computer desk, bent over the monitors and keyboard, hitting the keys furiously while looking from one screen to the other. His hat says “DAMN THE MAN”.

BEN: No…

Panel 2
Rob is now playing video games with Kev.

ROB: So we’re all unemployed now except for Benji?
KEV: Yep.
KEV (under his breath): overachiever

Panel 3
Ben’s still working furiously at his computer, and we can see the contents of the computer screen over his shoulder. Catch glimpses of the following:

“Partition check:
hda: hda1 hda2 hda3
hdb: hdb1
[MS-DOS FS Rel. 12,FAT 0, check=n,conv=b,uid=0,gid=0,umask=022,bmap]
[me=0x47,cs=0,#f=72,fs=1090,fl=140850,ds=10142290,de=0,data=10142290,se=30720,ts==120455532,ls=5120,rc=0,fc=4294967295]
Transaction block size = 512
[MS-DOS FS Rel. 12,FAT 0, check=n,conv=b,uid=0,gid=0,umask=022,bmap]
[me=0x47,cs=0,#f=72,fs=1090,fl=140850,ds=10142290,de=0,data=10142290,se=30720,ts==120455532,ls=5120,rc=0,fc=4294967295]
Transaction block size = 512
Kernel panic: VFS: Unable to mount root fs on 3:01”

Make sure at least the “partition check” and “kernel panic” are visible.

ROB (off panel): Who does he work for anyway?
KEV (off panel): Just some multinational. He makes sure their computer system doesn’t crash or something.

Panel 4
Ben ‘s now underneath the desk, and all of the computer equipment turns off simultaneously. He emerges from under the desk with the end of the power cord in his hand and his eyes are wide. His hat says “p0wned”.

Panel 5
Kev and Rob are staring at Ben from over the couch.

KEV: Uh oh. I’ve never seen Ben’s mission control center shut down before. It’s so quiet in here…
ROB: What just happened?

Panel 6
Ben’s still holding the power plug.

BEN: I’m no longer employed.
KEV (off panel): You got fired?
BEN: No, I’m just no longer employed. And the feds MAY be looking for me shortly…


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